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When Clarity Comes Calling by ~cwccreations:iconcwccreations:



Hello again unwelcome clarity
Walking through my forgotten unlocked door
Demanding acknowledgement while pouring her coffee
Black
Dragging yesterday’s dirt across the carpet
Feet up on the table
Smiling that devil’s smile
While I clean up the mess she made
Stains
And scars that refuse to be scrubbed clean
Alcohol to cleanse the wounds
Only to find it laced with the poison of her memories
Leaving
But never the way she came in
Always through another hole
Torn through the crumbling walls of this old heart
And when the dust settles I’m still standing in this room
Empty
©2008-2009 ~cwccreations
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I liked this a lot, but maybe the imagery feels a little muddled in the last section: the heart/room juxtaposition is clever but maybe needs more clues. The second section is the best and the worst for me; the first half is clever and powerful /Dragging yesterday’s dirt across the carpet/Feet up on the table/; the second half is mystifying!
I really like this! It's intriguing. I think I read it three times to grasp the full meaning. You had excellent word choice.
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